Megan went to school one day. In fact it was a snowy day. Megan wore a red dress and red ruby shoes. She also had on a big T-shirt leggings and a skirt.
Hi Maddie, I believe you read this to me last time we talked on Skype, and it's a great descriptive start. Megan must have been cold wearing a dress to school on a snowy day! Maybe you could show the reading what was going on in her head. So she was wearing a dress, a big T-shirt, and a skirt over her dress? That is quite the outfit. You could probably add more details because right now, as the reader, I can't quite picture her in my head yet. Does she have short or long hair? Is it red, blond, brown, black, etc.? Is she tall or short? Is she super skinny or full of muscle? Your job as the writer is to put an image of your character into the reader's mind. Once you establish her physical traits (her looks/image), try working on her personality. I'm just dying to know why you chose to write about this Megan girl. Is she nice or is she super mean? Is she happy or sad this day that she's going to school? I want to know her feelings. Explain how she feels inside. This is realistic FICTION, so feel free to use your imagination to make your own character. The reader can't judge how your character feels because it's your decision, it's your story and character. This is a great start, I cannot wait to conference on Thursday! (If we don't have a snow day). Realistic fiction is my favorite type of writing, so I'm really happy I get to help you out. Talk to you soon. -Angel
Hi Maddie,
ReplyDeleteI believe you read this to me last time we talked on Skype, and it's a great descriptive start.
Megan must have been cold wearing a dress to school on a snowy day! Maybe you could show the reading what was going on in her head.
So she was wearing a dress, a big T-shirt, and a skirt over her dress? That is quite the outfit.
You could probably add more details because right now, as the reader, I can't quite picture her in my head yet. Does she have short or long hair? Is it red, blond, brown, black, etc.? Is she tall or short? Is she super skinny or full of muscle? Your job as the writer is to put an image of your character into the reader's mind.
Once you establish her physical traits (her looks/image), try working on her personality. I'm just dying to know why you chose to write about this Megan girl. Is she nice or is she super mean? Is she happy or sad this day that she's going to school? I want to know her feelings. Explain how she feels inside. This is realistic FICTION, so feel free to use your imagination to make your own character. The reader can't judge how your character feels because it's your decision, it's your story and character.
This is a great start, I cannot wait to conference on Thursday! (If we don't have a snow day). Realistic fiction is my favorite type of writing, so I'm really happy I get to help you out. Talk to you soon.
-Angel