On the day Willy and Kathy got married, Matt dropped Willy's ring through the crack of the deck. Matt felt sorry. Amy was the flower girl. She was great at being the flower girl. She spread petals all over people. They tickled. Amy was very funny. She made really good jokes. When Amy's uncle cut the cake, he broke the knife that had a groom on top of it. Amy got to sit at the long table with the bride and groom. Lucky!! She got to sit next to Nick Cloutier. Amy is kind and happy and loving. She wears shirts with hearts on them and she wears jeans too. Willy and Kathy were happy to get married. Amy wanted to call her aunt her aunt before the wedding but she couldn't. Her aunt and uncle met each other through school and then they separated. Her uncle is a carpenter and he has an update on line and that is how they met. And that is her story of her aunt and uncle's wedding.
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ReplyDeleteWhat an exciting topic to write about! My dad just got married so I am all to familiar with the workings of a wedding and I think you did a nice job writing about it.
ReplyDeleteFirst I would like to start with your last sentence. When you wrote "And that is her story" who's story are you talking about? Amy's? Kathy's? It made me a little confused.
You give so much description about Amy and its really good. What does she look like? How is she related to Willy and Kathy? Are they her aunt and uncle? From the last sentence I gather that they Willy and Kathy are Amy's aunt and uncle but you might want to say that earlier in your story.
Finally, I have loved your voice throughout all of your pieces and I could really hear it when you exclaimed "Lucky!!" at the fact that Amy got to sit and the table with the bride and groom.
Good job on your realistic fiction!
Samantha